Death

[Lost Sanity]

(The following IS NOT a threat.. it may look sorta like one.. but trust me.. it isn't... just another simple poem about a pshyco killer, seeking revenge on all of those who hurt her...)

Death
Shadows linger, the lights fade.
What am I to do?
Stay silent? Or fight?

Fight for freedom?
Or let the chains on my soul
Keep me down?

Torment from those years
Still haunts me so
...The light is fading...

The darkness is taking its hold again.
Soon the flames will light the night.
Blood will flow like water from a river.

You don't take me seriously?
Just watch what I do to your family and friends.
Their lives will be lost to the blade of my sword.

The scent on the wind...
It carries the smell of rotting corpses.
Burning and decaying.

I warned you.
The darkness took over...
And ended lives.

Did you listen?
NO!
Death is comming...

I bring the scilence of it with my sword.
The flames will consume your corpse.
Just wait... your time is comming.

So wadda ya think? I want this to stay anonymous, so please don't ask who I am.. I'm just a shadow passing through.

[Kolava]

If I was a moderator for these boards, I would trace all these anonymous IPs so people would stop leaving their identities behind whenever they felt like it. But, seeing as how I'm not, I'm stuck playing along for now.

It's a decent poem, nice visuals, but the ending was shaky; it may have benefited the overall effect if you ended after "Death is coming" rather then drawing it out for another stanza.

(edited to remove accidental emoticon)

[Cherise]

Hm. I am feeling biotchy because of Geometry hours and three hours of sleep.
Death, what a lovely topic. And revenge! Yes! I've never seen these done before. Nah, they're definitely not cliche.
No, either are the words "soul" "torment" and "lingers".
This looks like something an adolescent did while trying to mimick a morbid lyric by Cradle of Filth, for instance.
You had good intentions, but the diction was.. It could have been stronger. Things could have altered to give it more of a depressing feel, since I believe for that is what you were going.
I know many of us will never be in a situation of revenge, but you need to think about it. You need to stop. Close your eyes. Focus yourself into the perspective.
Do it well enough and it will come out better.

[Kolava]

::pets Christa::

[Lady Desari]

It was interesting...And Rob why the hell is it so important for us to know who every single person is when they post on the boards? ::slinks off to bed::

[PaulAVincent]

It's not that important. When I set up these boards years ago I had the option to disable annoymous posting or guest posting but I didn't because it's not nessassary. It's that person's right to privacy really.

But on the subject of tracing IPs. It wouldn't work as well as you think, especially not since we're all on AOL. AOL masks your IP and changes it every time you log on. It cycles through 10 or so every week, so we could see my IP being shown the same as Desari's one moment, and then later on see my IP different than it was in the morning. Fixed IPs can be shown as long as the person isn't posting the message while on AOL, but other things will mask IPs as well. (Certain Firewalls, routers, etc.) I know personally my IP can be linked with tons of other IP addresses because I use a router that double masks so to speak, it displays a fake IP on sights like these, and another fake IP above that one. Mixed with AOL, that's 3 fake IPs someone would have to decode to find the real one, which just won't happen.

I know alot about all of this because I work in real estate, thus we take no chance in anyone stealing our files. But as far as these boards go. tracing IPs and giving names to the annonmous faces in my opinion would be a violation of trust, but more over it just wouldn't work. AOL's shared IPs getting mixed in there would lead you to make false accusations. There's a saying if it looks like an orange, it's an orange. Well in this case you never know, it could be a tangerine.

By the way, the poem wasn't bad at all whoever you are who posted it. I'm not a big poetry reader, or a reader period for that matter, but I enjoyed it. I agree with Kolava though, cut off the last verse.

[Kolava]

Shhh Paul, I'm well aware of that. I was trying to use the threat of it to discourage anonymous posting, the same sort of tactic a parent is using when they make unrealistic consequences for misbehaving. "You two better quiet down back there or I'll turn this car right around, you hear me?" But it didn't seem to work, and certainly won't work from now on now that you've blown my cover. I still feel the same way about anonymous posting, though; people should take credit for what they have to contribute unless there is a very valid reason for not doing so.

An example being the Federalist Papers published during the formation of our country's government. The authors were celebrities at the time, such as Thomas Jefferson, who chose to remain anonymous so that rivals and undecideds would approach the Papers with an open mind; it was not that they didn't want the repercussion to tarnish their record.

This was a valid reason for anonymity, and some of these guest posts may be following a simelar way of thinking, but if you read the way many of them are written it is clear that the identity of the author was withheld for lesser reasons, if any at all.

[Cherise]

- pet'd, throws ccap, cciat, ccaeat, and ccaiat out the window. and no, they're not random letters. curses geometry -

EDIT: Looking at this poem again, I am reminded of Jamie and how he wrote his poems (I.e. "comming" )... Hm.

[Lost Sanity]

Well atleast you replyed to it. That makes me happy. And I want to stay anonymous for a reason...

[Cherise]

I just wanted to apologize for meh snippy ness. Geometry HN gets me mad.
DON'T TAKE IT! X__X