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A poem
Dec 22, 2003 8:34:15 GMT -5
Post by Stoic Soul on Dec 22, 2003 8:34:15 GMT -5
All I see through this desolation
is another form of isolation
just as Life moves us apart
Death ends us just as we start
Through all the pain and suffering
realize this is only the beginning
the harbinger of things that not yet been done
the peoples lost and the wars won
the cycle of life and death continues on
until the day when the entire world is gone
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A poem
Dec 22, 2003 13:14:52 GMT -5
Post by Cherise on Dec 22, 2003 13:14:52 GMT -5
Good.. For some reason, "suffering" and "beginning" don't really rhyme as much to me.. Must be my evil Wisconsin accent! Anyway, just thought I'd point that out.
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A poem
Dec 22, 2003 13:48:43 GMT -5
Post by Stoic Soul on Dec 22, 2003 13:48:43 GMT -5
I appreciate your input Cherise, dont worry
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A poem
Jan 14, 2004 6:07:12 GMT -5
Post by Maggie_Draken on Jan 14, 2004 6:07:12 GMT -5
Very nice. Its modern poetry. It doesn't have to rhyme. Very intense.
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A poem
Jan 14, 2004 8:12:34 GMT -5
Post by Stoic Soul on Jan 14, 2004 8:12:34 GMT -5
:smiles: Thanks Maggie.
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A poem
Jan 14, 2004 11:26:42 GMT -5
Post by Maggie_Draken on Jan 14, 2004 11:26:42 GMT -5
You're welcome! I have some published poetry, and the ones they chose to publish were not my favorite ones. Strange huh? My fiance and I write (he also draws, (very well), does 3d modeling, writes, plays damn near every muscial instrument......::Sighs:: sick isn't it ::Smiles:  at our wedding we are gonna give each guest a book of our poetry. |
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A poem
Jan 14, 2004 19:13:28 GMT -5
Post by Stoic Soul on Jan 14, 2004 19:13:28 GMT -5
that would be a great idea Maggie.
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A poem
Jan 18, 2004 17:11:25 GMT -5
Post by Cherise on Jan 18, 2004 17:11:25 GMT -5
xD I know poetry doesn't have to rhyme, look at some of the old stuff I posted, almost nothing of it rhymes. But I just pointed out that the rest of it seemed to be following a rhyme scheme, that a few words seemed a bit off. But ah well.
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A poem
Jan 22, 2004 9:06:36 GMT -5
Post by Stoic Soul on Jan 22, 2004 9:06:36 GMT -5
Sometimes i can follow a rhyme scheme, other times i cant. These poems are what I feel. I take my thoughts and feelings and type it onto the computer
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A poem
Jan 24, 2004 9:21:53 GMT -5
Post by Cherise on Jan 24, 2004 9:21:53 GMT -5
And I write what I feel. And I draw what I feel. Just because two lines had approximate rhyme did not make it a poor poem. I never said that. Just pointed it out. - huff, being misconstrued -
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at our wedding we are gonna give each guest a book of our poetry.